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In many countries import food from other contry of the world.what are the advantages and disadvantages of this kasur.

In the
world
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world,
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countries
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 import and export
food
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 from
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country
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one country
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 to another
country
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 .
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 essay will include the advantages and disadvantages . On one hand ,
the
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access to a variety of foods will
let
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give access to a diverse range of products regardless of seasonal
locally
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. But it's good to explore
food
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 from
countries
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 it could
be count
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 as tradition , culture , and exploration . Sometimes
people
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 with diseases need for essentials of
food
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lthat
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that
is
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are
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 not in their
country
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people
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 with lactose
not
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 everything
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is avalible
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avalible
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available
 for them but their
goverment
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government
provide
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provides
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 them their nourishment . The variation of
food
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 could help
alot
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a lot
 of
people
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 in different ways .
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the
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importing types of
food
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play
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plays
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 a big role in
economy
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the economy
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 which
nourish
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nourishes
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 the
countries
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 .
Wherase
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Whereas
 if
this
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 product is needed internationally it will boost the
gdp
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GDP
 of the
country
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 .
On the other hand
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 , the potential for lower safety standards plays a big
rule
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role
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why
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 some
countries
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 produce their own
food
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 and
not
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do not
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 buy from abroad . Sometimes the
country
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 that we extract
food
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 from
have
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has
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 bad safety regulations
will
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that will
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cause
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have
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 big
affects
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effects
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 on the citizens .
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 eating fruit
that is
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colored
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coloured
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 and
it
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was not checked when came to the
country
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This
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 problem will eventually play
role
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a role
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on
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in
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 the body it will cause many diseases like cancer , and mostly blood
dieases
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diseases
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Finally
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food
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import
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imports
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 from outside should have
a high tests
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a high test
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 before entering any
country
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 because
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 is not
joke
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 but these are
people
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Develop your main points more thoroughly. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, followed by an explanation, evidence, and examples to support it. Avoid making generalized statements without backing them up with specific details.
coherence cohesion
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In conclusion, restate the main points succinctly. Clearly summarise the arguments discussed in the body of the essay. Avoid introducing new ideas or leaving the reader with unanswered questions.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Agricultural diversity
  • Seasonal produce
  • Economic trade
  • Carbon emissions
  • Supply chain
  • Food miles
  • Regulatory standards
  • Food sovereignty
  • Local economy
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