The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

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The presented bar chart delineates the changes in the proportion of two various

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types namely,

households

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owning and

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renting in two states (England and Wales) a period of nearly nine decades ( 1918 to 2011).

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. We can analyse that clearly at first glance the highest rates between 1918 and 1971 are

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in rented .

On the other hand

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in owned

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caught an upward tendency after 1971. It is explicitly observed that the changes in

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in rented

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are not stable. The highest point of

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option is in 1918 with roughly 75 individuals in every hundred.

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, it was

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rate that made their position the highest rate in

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graph.

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, in

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year, the lowest proportion of owned

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type with roughly 21 people in every hundred. In 1971 two types encountered at %50.

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, the owned type seems

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to rise abruptly

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to the rented type's dramatic decrease. It can be clearly seen that In 2001 preserves the lowest percentage (31 individuals in every hundred) of rented

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and the highest percentage (69 people in every hundred) of own category

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, in The rented

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dominated areas before 1971 and after the following years (excluding 1971) owned category covered large proportions.

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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen, pencil or brush. What are the reasons for this? Is the decline in writing by hand a positive or negative development?

In their advertising, business nowadays usually emphasizes that their products are new in some way. Why is this ? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?