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The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030.

The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030.
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The line graph
illustrated
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illustrates
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 the number of oils
use
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for
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by
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 the main consumers in
US
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the US
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, China,
Middle
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the Middle
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 East,
and
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apply
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Western Europe and Japan from 2009 to 2030. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, the USA was by far the biggest
consumers
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consumer
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 of oil and it
predicted
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is predicted
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 to remain the biggest until 2030. In 2009, oil consumption in
USA
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the USA
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 was around 9
million
barrels
 per
day
 and reached
to
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apply
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a peak
at
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of
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 10
million
barrels
 per
day
 in 2015, before predicted
beginning
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to dramatically
fell
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to 4
million
 by 2030.
While
,
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 the figure for Western Europe and Japan was around 4
million
barrels
 per
day
 and has been
declined
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declining
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 since to 2
millions
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million
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 in the year 2030. Oil consumption for China and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East
indicated
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was indicated
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 at 2
millions
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million
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barrels
 per
day
 each in 2009. By 2030, the figure for China and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East
slighly
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slightly
increasing
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increase
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to around 3.5 and 3
millions
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million
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barrels
 per
day
 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, barrels, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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