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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones in communication has had negative effects on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been argued by many that the frequent use of
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computers and
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mobile phones has an adverse effect on the user's ability to read and write. In my opinion, I tend to disagree with
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 improves the typing speed. On the one hand, the usage of electronic devices has increased the communication among the individuals.
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social media have a positive effect on
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reading capability.
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, the user tends to memorise new words
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laptops and handsets have a positive impact on the learning curve of an individual.
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Finland and they have made computer studies compulsory for all students.
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, the writing skills of a pupil are improved by making notes on the tablets.
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there is a marked improvement in the expression of logical thoughts in the written form.
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 capability. So, the children must be encouraged to use the technology, but in
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, every Indian child scores higher on the IELTS exam
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 the frequent use of media services.
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Submitted by emonsunderland2015 on

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