The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future.
The diagrams show information about the operation systems of the present
water
supply in Australia and there are places like the storage
, the accommodations, the water
treatment plant zone, and the river. As can be seen from the diagrams, it is obvious that those systems have a variety of water
such
as pure water
, stormwater, and wastewater.
In detail, water
is collected in a dam
or storage
and wastewater in the dam
or storage
is used for treatment plants meanwhile pure water
in a dam
is transferred to places such
as households, factories, shops, and cities or the mean is that pure water
is delivered to citizens.
Looking at the details, wastewater from the usage by people in cities, this
water
will go to the treatment plants. Lastly
, if there is rain in the towns, rainwater or stormwater will flow into the river. In my prediction, water
in the river will be transferred to the dam
or the storage
, making operation again.Submitted by champperkhu on
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