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People are using a lot of online language translation apps. Do the bene fits of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is argued that the usage of online linguistic
translation
 tools
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 becoming more common among individuals. I strongly believe that it has more
adavantges
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advantages
 than
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 since it helps to facilitate the work of translators and
movement
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 of
people
 around the world. First of all, traditionally those
people
 who have been working as
translator
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 always need a good dictionary and other tools to finish the given task as
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 as possible. But a good dictionary is not always enough to finish the job in a short time
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period
that is
 why the usage of modern online tools like
translation
 apps has a crucial role in
this
 field.
Secondly
, nowadays many
people
 are going to different
counries
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countries
 of the world as
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tourist
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 even to those countries where they could hardly find an
interprete
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interpreter
interpreted
. In
such
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 the utilisation of online
translation
 apps will be vitally
usful
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useful
.
For example
,when a friend of mine was in South Korea to attend a professional development course where he lived in
university
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 dormitory, during the night the fire alarm system of
building
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 was automatically on and he could not explain
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 security man of the campus the situation as
this
 man did not speak English. My friend texted what he intended to tell him in
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translator
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 and showed the
transaltion
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translation
transition
 to the security. In conclusion,
utilisation
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 of online
translation
 apps has more
benifits
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benefits
 than
disadvatages
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disadvantages
this
 is due the the fact that it helps the translators
to
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finish their jobs quickly and it
also
 is equally important for tourists to communicate with local
people
.
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