The best way to plan a holiday is by not planning at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

When planning a holiday, many people will choose to specifically and carefully set up for it,
while
others prefer taking a
trip
in a spontaneous
way
.
Someone
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Some
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supposes
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suppose
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that the best
way
to plan your holiday is without organizing it.
However
,
while
I concur that
this
kind of
trip
is exciting and enjoyable, I
also
believe it can potentially become messy
due to
some reasons. On one hand, you may experience an amusing excitement about
traveling
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with no preparation and not knowing what will come across your
trip
. You are free from taking a detailed plan and following all the noted routes. If you are a person who desires to challenge yourself and is always willing to take risks,
this
kind of travel could satisfy your wild soul.
For example
, if you take a journey to a completely new destination, do not follow any directions, try everything you want to try
,
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and fill up your day with new memorable experiences
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On the other hand
, we can protect our
trip
from going messy and being an awful event
due to
unpredicted elements. If you find out what you need to pay attention to in advance, making up your mind about accommodation, transportation, point of arrival, and activities can help you organize and enjoy your journey better.
For example
, when going to a mountainous area, you should watch the weather forecast to prepare suitable clothes and necessary tools if you don’t want to lose your
way
or be cold. Ultimately,
although
I agree that planning your holiday is the best
way
to experience something new, we
also
need some spontaneous moments.
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task achievement
Ensure a clear position is maintained throughout the essay. While you touched on both sides, a clear stance on the extent to which you agree or disagree should be more explicitly stated.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical progression of ideas. Ideas should fluently carry the reader to understand the arguments made without the need to reread.
task achievement
Include an unequivocal opinion in your conclusion, matching that which is expressed in your introduction, for a more cohesive argument.
task achievement
Though examples were present, make sure they are fully developed and well-integrated into the argument to support your main points effectively.
coherence cohesion
Utilize a range of cohesive devices and paragraphing more effectively to clarify the relations and progression of ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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