More and more businesses, as well as individuals, are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In modern societies, there are numerous businesses or individuals that have significant chances to apply technology in communication. People hold different views about using communication online compared to engaging in face-to-face interactions
by
businesses or individuals. Change preposition
with
While
there are some positive aspects to communicating online. I believe that face-to-face interaction is more beneficial than.
On the one hand, there are several reasons to explain why this
trend has advantages. One of them is communicating via the internet allows numerous companies to break down geographical barriers. In this
day and age, with the development of technology, employees can easily connect and meet with partners through applications such
as Zoom and Google Meet… not traveling
for 1000 Change the spelling
travelling
kilometers
. From that, they can save more money, time, Change the spelling
kilometres
local
meetings and have opportunities Correct word choice
and local
as well as
open business.
However
, in my point of view
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view,
this
trend brings some negative effects. First and foremost, using communication via the internet
has some potential risks. In fact, on the internet, humans can contact any person without knowing them in reality and vice versaCapitalize word
Internet
..
For that reason, people can be easily scammed by anyone Replace the punctuation
.
...
in
social media, Change preposition
on
for instance
by losing confidential company documents. Moreover
, according to
some research Change preposition
apply
used to discover
working overtime through screens will impact Verb problem
discovered
employee
mental health. That leads to control of the progress of work and poor productive work.
In summary, Fix the agreement mistake
employees
it is clear that
companies or individuals should be aware of both positive and negative consequences by
the trend of taking advantage or Change preposition
of
disadvantage
of communicating online.Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
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coherence cohesion
Expand your conclusion to encapsulate your views more comprehensively and give a fuller summary of the points argued. Your concluding statement should offer the reader a clear resolution and reflect back on the content of the essay.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.
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