The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar and line chart provides New York's average monthly

temperatures

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and revenue of bathing

suits

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during the first semester of 2012. Generally, The temperature rose gradually

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the bathing

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suits

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sales

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fluctuated for the first six months. The average

temperatures

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increased gradually, In January it started

with

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at

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30 degrees

fahrenheit

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and finished around 65 degrees

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in June.

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,

during

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January to April, both of average

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temperatures

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temperature

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rate and the bathing

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suits

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suit

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sales

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were showing

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similar

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a similar

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trend but for the

last

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three

months

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the

sales

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declined.

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swimsuits started the year with

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amount of $100,000 in January and reached

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their

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peak in April with almost $275,000.

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, as the weather

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getthing

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getting

hotter in May and June, the revenue dropped significantly to just $75,000 in May and $25,000 in June.

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, people tend to buy

the

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apply

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swimsuits before the summer

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starts

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and both figures show

negative

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a negative

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correlation between

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and

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of bathing

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.The bar and line chart below shows average monthly

temperatures

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and bathing suit

sales

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in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.