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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart provides data about the
percentage
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 of
women
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 going into higher
education
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 in the United Kingdom, the United States of America,
Australia
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, South Korea and France in 1980 and 2015.
Overall
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, in both 1980 and
2015
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2015,
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 the
percentage
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 of
women
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 going into higher
education
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 in
Australia
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 was the same. As can clearly be seen, in both 1980 and 2015 the
percentage
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 of
women
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 going into higher
education
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 in
Australia
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 was the same(a little less than 60 per
cent
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). In 1980 in the UK the
percentage
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 was roughly 35 per
cent
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. In The United
States
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States,
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 the
percentage
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 of females going into higher
education
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 was approximately 39 per
cent
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. In
France
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France,
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 by 1980 the
percentage
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 was 50 per
cent
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. The lowest
percentage
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 of
women
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 going into higher
education
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 in 1980
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 South Korea(roughly 15 per
cent
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.) In 2015 the
percentage
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 of
women
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 going into higher
education
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 in the UK and France was the same(approximately 55 per
cent
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). The
percentage
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 of
women
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 going into higher
education
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 in the USA and
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Australia
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 was
also
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 the same. The rate was a little less than 60 per
cent
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. The lowest
percentage
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 of
women
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 going into higher
education
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 compared to other countries in 2015
had
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was
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 South Korea. The rate was 30 per
cent
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.
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