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The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph above depicts the figure of movies produced by five different states from 2007 to 2009. Generally, Country A created the highest amount of
films
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in
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every year,
whereas
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country
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Country
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 C, D, and E
stayed
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had
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 in low number of under 20
films
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. Each nation has
their
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its
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 own fluctuation of launched big screen shows in the 3-year period.
Firstly
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,
Region
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 A
has
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had
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 almost 90
films
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 made in both 2007 and 2008, before the number diminished to merely 80 by the year
of
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2009.
Secondly
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,
Region
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 B slightly elevated their production from 50 to just a little above 50 in 2008 until it rocketed its sum to 70 in the year after.
Thirdly
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,
Region
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 C pictured a gradually increased total of
film
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films
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 from under 10 to almost 20
films
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 in just 3 years. Fourthly,
Region
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 D showed
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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 statistics from 2007 to 2009 in the range of below 10 to the middle of 10 and 20. Fifthly,
Region
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 E experienced
similar
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a similar
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 trend
with
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to
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Region
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 C with noticeably lower figures in the same period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words films, region with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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