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The graph bellow shows four categories of citrus fruits and top countries to which these were exported in thousand tones in 2012.

The graph bellow shows four categories of citrus fruits and top countries to which these were exported in thousand tones in 2012.
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The depicted bar graphs indicate a breakdown of four types of citrus fruits
such
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 as orange, lemon, grapefruits and others and represent nations in which these fruits were exported in 2012. The data was measured in thousands of tones.
Overall
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, it is apparently seen that the sales figures for
oranges
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 were by far the highest, and South Africa had the highest proportion of imported
oranges
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.
Moreover
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, Mexico was the leader in entering
lemons
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 and other varieties of citrus.
accordingly
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, Turkey was dominant in terms of grapefruits. In detail, as it comes to
oranges
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, South Africa was the top country in
this
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 regard, the figure was 1000, the data in Egypt halved and 400
oranges
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 were imported to the United States. The quantity of imported items
such
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 as
lemons
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 and others in Mexico was almost equal, 500.
Whereas
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 the US purchased 200
lemons
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 in 2012,
this
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 ratio for others was minimal.
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,
this
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 figure was closely followed by Egypt. Argentina bought around 100
lemons
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 in 2012. The figures for grapefruits have been altered between 200 in the US, 300 in Mexico to 400 in Turkey.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oranges, lemons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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