The chart below shows the total number of minutes in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided three categories from 1995 from 2002.
The table shows the number of minutes
were
consumed by customers in Unnecessary verb
apply
UK
by three types of telephone calls from 1995 to 2002. All minutes are Correct article usage
the UK
showed
in billions.
Wrong verb form
shown
Overall
, Local - fixed line
calls were higher than the other two types while
calls from mobiles were the lowest category according to
the given time
period.
Duration
of local-fixed Correct article usage
The duration
line
calls in 1995 was approximately 71 billions
which Change to singular
billion
also
Add a missing verb
is also
same
as in 2002. local-fixed Correct article usage
the same
line
calling time
had risen to peak
of 90 Add an article
the peak
a peak
billion
, then
duration had Correct word choice
and then
been
fallen to about 71 Unnecessary verb
apply
billion
. With regards to the national and international-fixed line
time
,which was the second largest category, recorded just under 40 billion
at the beginning of the period and which had been increasing until at the end
of the period reached to just over 60 billions
.
Change to singular
billion
In addition
, when it came to the
mobiles, people consumed 1 Correct article usage
apply
billion
time
in 1995 which Change to a plural noun
times
also
noticeable
Change the word
noticeably
that
increased slightly until 1999. Correct word choice
apply
In contrast
to the increase, After 1999, It started to rise dramatically which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
reached
Wrong verb form
reaching
of
its peak at over 40 Change preposition
apply
billion
in 2002.Submitted by Praslah on
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