The chart below below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

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The pie charts compare the amount of

water

consumption for three main activities namely

industury

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industry

, agriculture, and households in six regions around the world.

Overall

, the majority of nations in the world consume

water

for their

agricultureal

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agricultural

agriculture

aims,

while

europe

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Europe

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and

north

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North America

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america

have a high portion of use in industry.

According to

the charts, the highest portion of

water

is used in central

asia

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Asia

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which

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accountef

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accounted

for 88%, and that for

africa

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Africa

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and

south east

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south-east

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asia

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Asia

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was lower by a narrow margin, 4% and 7% respectively. Followed by,

south

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South America

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america

measures around ¾ of total

water

consumption. the amount for

north

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North America

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america

and

europe

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Europe

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stood at 39% and 32%. Regarding

datails

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data

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industrial

water

usage, europe and

north

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North America

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america

ranked

approximatley

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approximately

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half. the proportion of householding

were

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responsible for the lowest share, experiencing amounts lower than 20%.

while

under 20% was in south

america

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America

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, the amount for

central

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Central

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and

south

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apply

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east asia

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Southeast Asia

was the same number of 7%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

161 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

consumption
irrigation
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industrial
regional disparity
economic structure
sustainable management
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