The chart below below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The chart below below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The pie charts compare the amount of
water
consumption for three main activities namely
industury
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industry
, agriculture, and households in six regions around the world.
Overall
, the majority of nations in the world consume
water
for their
agricultureal
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agricultural
agriculture
aims,
while
europe
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Europe
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and
north
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North America
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america
have a high portion of use in industry.
According to
the charts, the highest portion of
water
is used in central
asia
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Asia
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which
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accountef
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accounted
for 88%, and that for
africa
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and
south east
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asia
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Asia
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was lower by a narrow margin, 4% and 7% respectively. Followed by,
south
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South America
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america
measures around ¾ of total
water
consumption. the amount for
north
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North America
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america
and
europe
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Europe
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stood at 39% and 32%. Regarding
datails
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data
of
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industrial
water
usage, europe and
north
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North America
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america
ranked
approximatley
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approximately
as
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half. the proportion of householding
were
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responsible for the lowest share, experiencing amounts lower than 20%.
while
under 20% was in south
america
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America
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, the amount for
central
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Central
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and
south
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apply
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east asia
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Southeast Asia
was the same number of 7%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america with synonyms.
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  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
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