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The diagrams below give information about two road tunnels in two Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about two road tunnels in two Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate tunnels in two towns in
Autralia
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Australia
 and give information related.
Overall
, the
tunnel
 in
first
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the first
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 city is built beneath the water which is surrounded by sand
while
other
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the other
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tunnel
 is constructed under a main road which is covered by stone and clay. The first
tunnel
 was started
to build
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built
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 in 1986 and completed in 1998
whereas
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cost around $555 million.
Furthermore
, it
include
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 two lanes which facilitate two passenger
vehicle
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vehicles
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 to drive same side or opposite side.
Additionally
, the
tunne'sl
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tunne's
 length and deep
is
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are
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 about 2.2km and 1.8m respectively. With regards to the second
tunnel
, it was started to construct in 2002 and it took four years to complete the project.
However
,
which
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it
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 was invested $1.1 billion and built under a main town.
Moreover
, the
tunnel
 is 2.5m
in
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deep and 3.6km in length.
In contrast
 to the
tunnel
 which has more space to run three vehicles
to
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in
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 the same direction or the opposite at the same time.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tunnel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban infrastructure
  • commuter
  • traffic congestion
  • toll collection system
  • vehicular capacity
  • bi-directional lanes
  • engineering feat
  • innovative design
  • safety measures
  • construction materials
  • ventilation system
  • emergency exits
  • tunnel clearance
  • inauguration date
  • public-private partnership
  • sustainability features
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