▪️You work for a company where the manager is soon going to retire. Write a letter to the assistant manager. In your letter: ▪️ Propose how the retirement party for the manager can be organised. ▪️Explain how the manager has influenced you at work. ▪️Suggest a suitable retirement gift for the manager. Write at least 150 words.
Dear Mrs. Homa
With pleasure, I was informed that
Mrs.
Hoseini will be Change the punctuation
Mrs
retired
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retiring
close
future. She was a kind of mentor to me and Correct word choice
near
help
me in developing and coping with my responsibilities from the very first day of my job. She taught me to face my work challenges and without panicking just try to find solutions. Her strength and patience during the time that I work for her always influence me in my working and personal life. With respect, I would be happy if you let me plan some details for her goodbye Wrong verb form
helped
party
.I am a good cook and I could make some snacks and sandwiches for the party
, besides
that if it is ok I can ask my husband to play some music at the party
. Also
, I was thinking of a surprise gift for her, something which reminds her our
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of our
respects
and sentiment. I know a very special gold gallery and they design customer’s name on gold and we could order a necklace with her name written on Fix the agreement mistake
respect
onside
and the company’s name on the other side. By wearing it she could remember all her working memories and the time which she had with us.
I know, you and other colleagues may have your own ideas and suggestions, So I would appreciate Correct your spelling
one side
if
you just let me to contribute Correct pronoun usage
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in
conducting her goodbye Change preposition
apply
party
.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter has a clear paragraph structure with separate paragraphs for each point proposed.
coherence cohesion
Use transitional words and phrases to guide the reader smoothly from one idea to the next.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single point as requested in the task. Avoid mixing different ideas in the same paragraph.
task achievement
Fully develop each point required by the task to provide a complete response.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter suitable for the audience and purpose.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.