The bar chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying habits in five Australian cities.

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates the habits of
people
for buying
coffee
and tea in Australian
cities
, namely, Sydney, Melbourne,
Brisban
,
Adelaide
and
Hobart
.
Overall
, in
last
Correct article usage
the last
show examples
4 weeks, most of the
cities
show that
people
went to a cafe for
coffee
or tea, except
Adelaide
,
while
fewer
people
bought fresh
coffee
. Another kind
such
as instant
coffee
is in the middle position and numbers. It can be seen that the percentages of fresh
coffee
in every city are lower than the others.
Furthermore
, the share of
Brisban
is the smallest city where
people
purchased
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purchase
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fresh
coffee
, only one-third of
people
. Sydney and Melbourne show a small difference for fresh
coffee
which can be looked
,
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at, it
show examples
it
Correct your spelling
at
show examples
only less than 3%. Other
cities
particularly
Adelaide
and
Hobart
are in
the
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apply
show examples
similar numbers
of
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as
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Brisban
which is less than 40%.
Beside
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Besides
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that, in the same uniform, Melbourne,
Brisban
and
Hobart
are the
cities
where a cafe
had
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has
show examples
been visited many times by their
people
whereas
Adelaide
is the smallest one.
However
, more than half of individuals bought instant
coffee
in
Brisban
and
Hobart
while
less than 50% of
people
in Sydney purchased it.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, cities, brisban, adelaide, hobart with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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