Environmental protection should be the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some
peope
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people
thinks
Correct subject-verb agreement
think
the
Correct your spelling
that
environment
safety is attributed to the authorized Replace the word
environmental
people
and not individuals,
because they are not giving a stack contribution. I completely Remove the comma
apply
dissagree
with the former idea and Correct your spelling
disagree
this
essay will discuss my notion about it.
Most stakeholders do not engage directly with the environmental protection programmes in the field. In fact, their contribution only
limited Add a missing verb
is only
in
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to
the
administrative functions Correct article usage
apply
such
as,
raising Remove the comma
apply
fund
, creating Fix the agreement mistake
funds
report
for the proposed program, improving Fix the agreement mistake
reports
netizen's
awareness through Fix the agreement mistake
netizens'
campaign
Fix the agreement mistake
campaigns
in
social media platforms, and creating policies. As they only work behind Change preposition
on
desk
and rarely monitor the environment closely from the field, I; Fix the agreement mistake
desks
therefore
, personally doubt that those people
know exactly the crucial problems that endangered
the whole ecosystem.
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endanger
Conversely
, many individuals already undertake elephantic
real-actions to protect the habitat compared to the politicians. Since most of them are living closely Correct word choice
illegal
to
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with
the
nature and witnessing the problems that may Correct article usage
apply
harmful
to each habitat, it is acceptable that Add a missing verb
be harmful
people
are more capable to undergo
the Verb problem
apply
performance
directly to secure the ecosystem. Replace the word
performing
For example
, Indonesian actor, Hamish Daud has established Octopus
company which Correct article usage
the Octopus
concerning
Wrong verb form
is concerned
in
the 3R projects Change preposition
with
at
several areas in Indonesia, since he knows that Indonesians Change preposition
in
are having
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have
a
mediocre knowledge Correct article usage
apply
on
reducing, reusing, and recycling liters. The existence of that company successfully Change preposition
of
encourage
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encourages
people
to transform their waste into something applicable and raise awareness on the
reusable rubbish.
Correct article usage
apply
To conclude
, even though stakeholders predominantly use their authority to settle the administrative things for the existence on
the environmental protection projects, I disagree with the notion that they make Change preposition
of
more
subtle contribution, as individuals are more closely to Add an article
a more
the
nature and witness the danger directly on the field.Correct article usage
apply
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