the graph below shows the unemployment rates in the USA and Japan between march 1993 and march 1999. write at least 150 words

the graph below shows the unemployment rates in the USA and Japan between march 1993 and march 1999. write at least 150 words
This
line chart depicts the rates of unemployed individuals in the USA and Japan, over a period of 6 years.
Overall
, it can be seen that there was a remarkable variation in the
ratio
of workforce between the two countries.
According to
what is shown, even though the proportion of unemployment was high in the USA, at 7 per
cent
, in 1993, it dropped gradually to 5.5 per
cent
, in 1995.
Then
, it remained steady till 1996. After that, there was a modest decline until it reached 4.5 per
cent
, in1998. In the end, it stopped, at around 4 per
cent
, in 1999. Regarding Japan,
however
, the
ratio
of unemployed workforce was low approximately, at 2 per
cent
, it soared slightly to 3.5 per
cent
, in 1996. And
then
, the percentage was nearly consistent till 1998,
then
, it rocketed to about 4.7%, in 1999.
To sum up
, we could say that,
although
there was a significant difference in the
ratio
of unemployment between the two countries, in 1993, about 5%, the
ratio
of unemployment became the same, at about 4.5 between 1998 and 1999.
Finally
, the
ratio
of workforce in Japan was higher than in the USA compared to the beginning.
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