The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
"The line graph provides a comparison of the fast food
consumption
of teenagers in Australia between 1975 and 2000, a period of 25 years. From the graph it can plainly
viewed
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that the
consumption
of
fish
and
chips
declined
whereas
the amount of pizza and hamburgers eaten soared over the period. In 1975, the most popular fast food with Australian teenagers was
fish
and
chips
, being eaten
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100 times a year.
This
was far higher than pizza and hamburgers, which were consumed approximately 5 times a year.
However
, apart from a brief rise again from 1980 to 1985, the
consumption
of
fish
and
chips
gradually declined over the 25-year timescale to finish at just under 40. In sharp contrast to
this
, teenagers ate
other
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two fast foods at much higher levels. Pizza
consumption
increased gradually until it overtook the
consumption
of
fish
and
chips
in 1990. It
then
levelled off from 1995 to 2000. The biggest rise was seen in hamburgers as the occasions they were eaten increased sharply throughout the
1970's
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/
1980's
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, exceeding that of
fish
and
chips
in 1985. It finished at the same level that
fish
and
chips
began, with
consumption
of 100 times a year."
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, fish, chips with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational settings
  • percentage
  • representation
  • disparities
  • predominance
  • gender imbalance
  • societal expectations
  • historical roles
  • implications
  • trends
  • gender gap
  • educational outcomes
  • gender stereotypes
  • policies
  • initiatives
  • perceptions
  • effectiveness
  • primary school
  • secondary school
  • nursery
  • university
  • further education
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