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The plan below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.4

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The presented maps depict the status quo and change project of
University
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the University
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sports
center
's facilities. On the one hand, We analyse that clearly at first glance, the areas with the highest change are outdoor courts which near the middle
center
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centre
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. The gym, pool and changing
room
 nearly remained stable.
On the other hand
, It is explicitly observed that in the second map the two new changing
room
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rooms
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is
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are
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 going to
establish
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be established
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 on
right
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the right
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 and left
corner
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corners
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 of the
sport
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sports
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center
 .
Besides
,
Sports
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the Sports
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 shop will supplement next to
right
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the right
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 changing
room
 and
café
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the café
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 will link next to
left
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the left
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 changing
room
,
thus
, new facilities projects can clearly
been
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be
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 noticed.
Likewise
, The left outdoor courts will
be replace
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be replaced
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 by
Leisure
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the Leisure
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 pool which is parallel to
25
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the 25
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m pool. The gym above
seem
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seems
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 to expand
in contrast
 to
changing
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the changing
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room
 and setting. The right outdoor courts will unite.
Consequently
, The
sports
center
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centre
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 will meet two equal dancing rooms.
Overall
, Revolution plans in the University
Sports
Center
 will sustain to encounter various new facilities and it is these developments that will make
this
 area more better.
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Your response should thoroughly cover the requirements outlined in the task. Make sure to describe the major changes rather than listing them. Include a clear overview that highlights the main trends, differences, or stages. Be comprehensive in your explanation, ensuring all parts of the question are addressed. Illustrations or examples should be well-chosen to support your points and enhance the clarity of your response. Aim to expand on your ideas to demonstrate a deeper understanding of the material presented.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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