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Cohabitation is believed to bring huge advantages for young people since it enables them to fully understand each other before deciding to get married. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The topic above
adresses
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addresses
 that many
society
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societies
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believed
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believe
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 that
cohabitation
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 is a way to bridge the two people who are getting married
understand
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and understand
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 each other in terms of communication and understanding. I fully agree to
this
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 matter. I speak
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this
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of this
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 as
a
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apply
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married-life training, which
is not only talk
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does not only talk
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 about beauty and
wealthy
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,
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 but
also
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as
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about
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 the necessity of
calm
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a calm
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 mind and better communication with our
partner
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.
First,
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marriage is different
with
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from
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 so
common-relationship
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many relationships
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, like boyfriend and girlfriend. Once they
married
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are married
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, they have a spouse to look for until the end of the day. That's why
cohabitation
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 is a way to express their
truly
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true
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 self to
other
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another partner
other partners
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partner
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. Knowing each other without hesitation in real time is what every
partners
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partner
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need
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needs
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 to tackle any problems ahead.
For example
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, in three years of relationship, a friend of mine never knows that their
partner
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 is afraid of bugs. After implementing
cohabitation
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, she
finally
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 knew it and
can
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could
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 communicate how to handle it in the future.
Second,
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to be married means choosing
best
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 of the best
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partner
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partners
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 in the world. Shall we avoid the
worse
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worst
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 even if
misscommunications
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miscommunications
miscommunication
miss-communications
are
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have
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 already
occured
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occurred
.
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?
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Cohabitation
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, once again,
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such
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is such
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 a way to implement better communication in routines. Any doubts before marriage can be said when the event begins to fix the will of the sacral (marriage). Many people
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for
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, for
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 instance, are easily getting
divorce
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divorced
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 because of
misscommunication
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miscommunication
, they
dont
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don't
 fully understand their partners and easily decide to get
marry
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married
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. So, in a nutshell,
cohabitation
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need
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needs
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 to be implemented
of
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by
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 each
partner
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 who will get
marry
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married
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 to fully understand how
to begin
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 a life and continuously
living
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live
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 with
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one partners
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partners
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partner
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 forever and
avoiding
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avoid
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 the
worse
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worst
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event
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events
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.

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coherence cohesion
The essay does not exhibit a clear and logical structure. It is essential to have a well-organized essay that introduces the topic, develops the argument coherently, and ends with a summarizing conclusion. Consider using clear paragraphing with topic sentences that clearly state the main point of each paragraph.
task achievement
You offered a personal view on the topic, but the response could be further developed to be complete. You should expand on your ideas and provide clearer and more detailed explanations. Furthermore, the argument needs to be supported with a wider range of examples, as it lacked depth and perspectives outside of personal experience.
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