You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Cohabitation is believed to bring huge advantages for young people since it enables them to fully understand each other before deciding to get married. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
The topic above
adresses
that many Correct your spelling
addresses
society
Change to a plural noun
societies
believed
that Wrong verb form
believe
cohabitation
is a way to bridge the two people who are getting married Use synonyms
understand
each other in terms of communication and understanding. I fully agree to Correct word choice
and understand
this
matter. I speak Linking Words
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this
as Change preposition
of this
a
married-life training, which Correct article usage
apply
is not only talk
about beauty and Change the verb form
does not only talk
wealthy
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wealth
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
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as
the necessity of Change preposition
about
calm
mind and better communication with our Correct article usage
a calm
partner
.
Use synonyms
First,
marriage is different Linking Words
with
so Change preposition
from
common-relationship
, like boyfriend and girlfriend. Once they Correct your spelling
many relationships
married
, they have a spouse to look for until the end of the day. That's why Add a missing verb
are married
cohabitation
is a way to express their Use synonyms
truly
self to Change the word
true
other
Change the wording
another partner
other partners
partner
. Knowing each other without hesitation in real time is what every Use synonyms
partners
Change to a singular noun
partner
need
to tackle any problems ahead. Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
For example
, in three years of relationship, a friend of mine never knows that their Linking Words
partner
is afraid of bugs. After implementing Use synonyms
cohabitation
, she Use synonyms
finally
knew it and Linking Words
can
communicate how to handle it in the future.
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could
Second,
to be married means choosing Linking Words
best
of the best Correct article usage
the best
Use synonyms
partner
in the world. Shall we avoid the Fix the agreement mistake
partners
worse
even if Replace the word
worst
misscommunications
Correct your spelling
miscommunications
miscommunication
miss-communications
are
already Verb problem
have
occured
Correct your spelling
occurred
.
Change the punctuation
?
Cohabitation
, once again, Use synonyms
Linking Words
such
a way to implement better communication in routines. Any doubts before marriage can be said when the event begins to fix the will of the sacral (marriage). Many people Add a missing verb
is such
Linking Words
for
instance, are easily getting Add the comma(s)
, for
divorce
because of Wrong verb form
divorced
misscommunication
, they Correct your spelling
miscommunication
dont
fully understand their partners and easily decide to get Correct your spelling
don't
marry
.
So, in a nutshell, Change the form of the verb
married
cohabitation
Use synonyms
need
to be implemented Change the verb form
needs
of
each Change preposition
by
partner
who will get Use synonyms
marry
to fully understand how Wrong verb form
married
to begin
a life and continuously Linking Words
living
with Wrong verb form
live
Correct pronoun usage
one partners
partners
forever and Fix the agreement mistake
partner
avoiding
the Wrong verb form
avoid
worse
Correct word choice
worst
event
.Fix the agreement mistake
events
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coherence cohesion
The essay does not exhibit a clear and logical structure. It is essential to have a well-organized essay that introduces the topic, develops the argument coherently, and ends with a summarizing conclusion. Consider using clear paragraphing with topic sentences that clearly state the main point of each paragraph.
task achievement
You offered a personal view on the topic, but the response could be further developed to be complete. You should expand on your ideas and provide clearer and more detailed explanations. Furthermore, the argument needs to be supported with a wider range of examples, as it lacked depth and perspectives outside of personal experience.