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Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Many people tend to
work
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 in a
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 regarding the school's
projects
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while
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 others would like to do it independently.
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 working in an individual
behavior
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 may let
students
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 decide everything they want, I believe that doing it in a
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 will lead them to a good understanding of broad views and do the task quickly. Teachers very often divide their
students
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 into a few groups when doing assignments. The members might come from any background. Starting a project together in a
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, will create a good way of communication among
students
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 and enable them to make a better decision easily.
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, some tasks that contain complex problems,
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 as math or physics, will be easier to be done by five
students
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 together
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 of alone.
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, working on a project in an individual manner means that pupils need to take full responsibility for the task solely, and count everything on their own,
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 as looking for innovations and preparing materials. These methods, sometimes, would make them stressed and fully desperate amidst the journey of the
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 if they attend a difficult position for solutions.
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, in my school, when the lecturers assign art
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 to the
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,
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 as making sculptures or paintings, they may have the right to choose either
work
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 in a
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 or alone. I witnessed, that some of my friends, who prefer to
work
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 individually, could not finish the
projects
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 on time. The main reason for
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 was that they were stuck developing ideas without a partner to discuss them with. In sum, doing the job individually could give more space for self-exploration.
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, working in a
group
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 together will make people appreciate the diversity of ideas and can end the tasks faster.
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Task Achievement
Ensure full coverage of the task by discussing the two sides of the argument comprehensively and equally. Be sure to fully elaborate on your opinion to ensure task completion.
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Include a clear introduction and conclusion that summarise the main points made in the essay. Make sure these elements are distinct and well-defined.
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Support your main points with specific examples or further explanation to strengthen the argument and maintain task focus.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organise your essay with a clear logical structure including paragraphing and use of cohesive devices for fluidity, clear progression, and logical sequencing of ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear central topic and all sentences support that topic. Use cohesive devices such as linking words, pronouns, and conjunctions effectively to help the text flow.
Coherence and Cohesion
Develop each supporting point sufficiently and ensure they relate directly to the essay prompt. Use a variety of cohesive devices and strive for paragraph cohesion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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