A flow chart shows the process of making jam. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

A flow chart shows the process of making jam. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The flow chart visually illustrates the production of jam.
Overall
,
this
process involves 9 major steps to transform raw
apples
into jams that are available in the grocery stores in your area.
Initially
, raw
apples
are received and they must be sorted out to select only the good ones. Before all
apples
are crushed, they need to be washed and cleaned previously.
Then
,
apples
are crushed, and after that, they are ready to be mixed in a vessel, lime juice and water are added to the mixer as well. At the same time, the source of sucrose is screened.
Next,
the mixed materials are boiled in a chamber for some time. Once they are cooked, they need to rest for some time until they set.
Then
, jams are able to be filled into jars.
However
, the jars must be washed and sanitised beforehand.
Subsequently
, jars of jam are labelled and
finally
are dispatched to the distributors.
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