The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
The bar chart depicts the distribution of teacher's gender in a variety of educational environments in the United Kingdom during the year 2010.
Overall
, it is clearly apparent that there are big gaps between male and female lectures. The highest and lowest belong to males and females in the nursery respectively. Turning to the details,
First,
the most noticeable disparity is in the proportion of
teachers
in preschool and primary school, the number of male
teachers
in
these two formal education
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is a little less than 10%,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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the number of female
teachers
is almost 100%. The gaps decrease in secondary school where the difference between
this gender
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is approximately 10%. In college, the
distributionbecame
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distribution became
equal, where male and female lecturers had the same percentage, which was around 50%.
Furthermore
, there is an upward trend belong to male lecturers in private training institutes and universities. In university, male
teachers
assert their dominance in number, it is around 70%
while
the female is just over 20%
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational settings
  • percentage
  • representation
  • disparities
  • predominance
  • gender imbalance
  • societal expectations
  • historical roles
  • implications
  • trends
  • gender gap
  • educational outcomes
  • gender stereotypes
  • policies
  • initiatives
  • perceptions
  • effectiveness
  • primary school
  • secondary school
  • nursery
  • university
  • further education
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