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The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Writing: The table below illustrates the database of
techer
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teacher
teachers
 in high/secondary
school
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schools
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 in
differents
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different
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 countries’ salaries during 2009.
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, there were many precious changes in the secondary and high schoolteacher wages in 2009. Noticeably, the most valuable pay belonged to Luxembourg.
Starting
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 income of Luxembourg at 80.000, which was the highest, followed by Denmark with 47.000, 13.000 more than Australia. And the beginning earning in Korea was 30.500 and the lowest with 28.000 was seen in
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Japan. In
contract
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contrast
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, the
years
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top
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the top
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 fee in Korea and Japan were the longest group with 37 and 34
years
 respectively, the comparison with Denmark,
where
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 had the shortest time to
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 the top level, was 8
years
, just over ⅕ of Korea. The most profitable salary in each
years
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 was
Luxemboug
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Luxembourg
 at 112.000,
also
 in
maxium
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maximum
 payroll with 139.000.
While
,
korean
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Korean
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 and
japan
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Japan
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, 2 countries exhibited a remarkable
different
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 in the
amount
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 of annual earnings and
maxium
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maximum
 income, the changes were 12.000 and 13.400 respectively. The opposite was seen in
the
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Australia and Denmark, where showed the same number in
fee
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fees
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 per
years
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year
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 and
maxium
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maximum
 wages, with 48.000 and 54.000 respectively, which were approximately
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half of
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Luxembourg .
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