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The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the flow chart illustrates
the
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Australias'
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water
 supply system in
present
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the present
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 and future.
overall
, there are four places, those are
dam
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the dam
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, society sites,
water
 treatment
plant
, and river, and three
kind
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kinds
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 of
water
 which deliver to the sites, namely ure,
strom
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Strom
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, and
waste
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wastewater
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water
. the first place where
become
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a
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the
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 main site is
dam
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a dam
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. the
dam
save
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much
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a lot of
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water
 to
fullfil
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fulfil
 any demand from other sites. the
dam
supply
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supplies
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waste
water
 to
water
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the water
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 treatment
plant
while
 pure
water
send
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 to
the
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household
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households
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, factories, shops, and
city
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the city
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.
the
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The
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water
 which
have
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has
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 been used
then
become
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becomes
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a
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apply
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waste
water
 and it
send
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 to
water
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the water
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treament
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treatment
plant
 too. the
plant
 usually
treat
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treats
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 the
water
 with
sparating
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separating
 pure
water
 from any
contaminat
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contaminant
contaminated
contaminate
. the good
water
are consist
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consists
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 of zero bacteria,
low
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is low
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 in ppm, and has a lot of
mineral
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minerals
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 which
is
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are
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 beneficial for
poeple
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people
. Despite
waste
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wastewater
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water
, the
water
whose
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that
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 civil society use,
creating
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creates
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storm
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stormwater
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water
.
this
water
 directly
deliver
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delivered
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 to
river
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the river
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.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, dam, plant, waste with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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