Some people believe the benefits of tourism outweigh the problems it creates in a particular place. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
With the ever-increasing number of
people
who partake in different variety
of Fix the agreement mistake
varieties
the
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apply
tourism
activities, it has widely
hot debate Change the word
wide
that
the Change preposition
about
benefits
and drawbacks of the
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apply
tourism
. Some people
mentioned that people
believes
the Change the verb form
believe
benefits
of tourism
is exceeded
the total drawbacks of Wrong verb form
exceed
tourism
, especially creates job opportunities and boosts the
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economical
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economic
development
. Likewise
, others maintained that tourism
may pollute the environment and formulates the issues of the
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apply
overtourism
. In view of the potential advantages of Correct your spelling
over-tourism
over tourism
tourism
is numerous and prolonged time, I have
strongly agree that Unnecessary verb
apply
tourism
brings the
advantages Correct article usage
apply
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that outweight
outweight
the disadvantages.
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outweigh
To begin
with, the prime benefits
of tourism
is
to enhance the employment rate and directly Change the verb form
are
increases
the economic Correct subject-verb agreement
increase
development
in a particular country or city. It is because the
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apply
tourism
can attract more tourists
to different spectacular, memorable and remarkable scenic spots. For instance
, Hong Kong Disneyland Resort and Ocean Park are the three main tourism
scenic spots for Replace the word
tourist
appealing
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appeal
various
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to various
tourists
to join their activities. Different shopping points can stimulate the population flow and the total amount
of tourist consumption. For example
, according to
the statistics conducted by the University of Hong Kong, 90% of respondents claimed that tourists
can stimulate and revitalise the local economy by appealing different
kinds of Change preposition
to different
tourists
and they can have ability
to buy different things to flourish the economy Change the article
the ability
development
. The more tourists
buy, the more local economic people
enjoy. It is no exaggeration to say that it not only lets tourists
can
have Verb problem
apply
positive
shopping experienceCorrect article usage
a positive
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
benefits
to
the diverse economic Change preposition
apply
development
and gross domestic market. Therefore
, tourism
is very positive to the economic developement
.
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development
Then
, depsite
the huge Correct your spelling
despite
amount
of benefits
and potential that covers
in the above statement, Wrong verb form
are covered
the
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apply
tourism
may also
threaten the chances of environmental pollutions
and showcases the issues of Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
over
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over-tourism
tourism
particularly. The reasons why some busy, booming and developed countries may have the underlying root problems of overtourism
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over-tourism
over tourism
is
many scenic spots, theme Correct subject-verb agreement
are
park
and without the higher travelling fee and Fix the agreement mistake
parks
cost
, Fix the agreement mistake
costs
as well as
producing quite a lot of environmental problems. To cite an example, the
London Bridge in Britain has encountered Correct article usage
apply
the
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apply
similiar
issues and as a results need to be added the travelling cost with providing tax. Yet, another example, Correct your spelling
similar
in
Hong Kong, it is Add a missing verb
is in
universially
acknowledged that Correct your spelling
universally
people
not only covers
the chances of having some Correct subject-verb agreement
cover
overtourists
who join in the lower travelling cost and price by some Chinese Mainlander Traveller, Correct your spelling
over tourists
they
can not have any higher consumption power Add the word(s)
but they also
with
providing Change preposition
by
huge
Add an article
a huge
amount
of environmental pollution, like increasing
Add an article
an increasing
amount
of plastic bottles, plastic rubbish that kinds of things which can't solve in the hygriene
landfills. Correct your spelling
hygiene
Also
, the total amount
of rubbish will be increased. Hence
, the
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apply
tourism
indeed exists the
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on the
darkside
.
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dark side
Finally
, all things concluded that tourism
may have the
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benefits
or drawbacks aspects, which brings in the economic and environmental aspects. Nevertheless
, the drawside
of Correct your spelling
drawbacks
tourism
may include the
overtourism and environmental problems. Certainly, the Correct article usage
apply
benefits
of tourism
may give you positive
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a positive
amount
of job oppportunities
and Correct your spelling
opportunities
enhances
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enhance
the
economic growth. Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
, it is advisable that people
should balance with the local economy and design the guidance to the tourists
so that they can not only bear the responsibility of buying thing
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things
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
concerns
the local environment.Correct subject-verb agreement
concern
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coherence cohesion
The essay presents ideas on both sides of the argument regarding tourism's benefits and drawbacks but occasionally deviates from a clear and logical progression of ideas. Work on creating a more structured argument with clear paragraphing and transition sentences to guide the reader through your discussion.
task achievement
While the essay attempts to address the prompt, there are issues with specificity and development of ideas. Examples provided are relevant but lack detail and depth. Enhance responses by giving concrete examples with clear links to the central arguments and expanding on how these examples support your position.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.