The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph depicts
variation
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a variation
the variation
of
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in
population
participating in different major Add an article
the population
sports
, gentle walking, Use synonyms
basketball
, Use synonyms
cricket
, jogging, gym, football and hiking, in the period Use synonyms
of
1997 and 2017 in a specific area. As reflected by Change preposition
apply
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the Y'
Y'
axis, the population is measured from zero to 60 Change noun form
Y
thousands
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thousand
of
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people
with Use synonyms
interval
of ten Add an article
an interval
the interval
thousand
.
At first glance, it becomes clear that Use synonyms
people
going Use synonyms
to
gentle Change preposition
apply
walk
is highest in both 1997 and 2017 Replace the word
walking
while
Linking Words
people
going to Use synonyms
gym
remained stable in both years. Correct article usage
the gym
Similarly
, Linking Words
people
playing Use synonyms
basketball
increased from one Use synonyms
time-interval
to Correct your spelling
time interval
next
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the next
whereas
the popularity of Linking Words
cricket
drastically decreased among Use synonyms
adults
at Use synonyms
same
time interval. Correct article usage
the same
Overall
, the Linking Words
number of
population Correct quantifier usage
apply
involving
in various Wrong verb form
involved
sports
like walking, Use synonyms
basketball
, jogging, football and hiking Use synonyms
were
lowest in 1997 and increased in 2017.
In more Correct subject-verb agreement
was
details
, around fifty Fix the agreement mistake
detail
thousand
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of
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apply
adults
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were participating
in gentle walking in 1997, Wrong verb form
participated
they
increased by five Correct pronoun usage
which
thousand
and became the highest participated Use synonyms
sports
among other Use synonyms
sports
in 2017.
Correspondingly, the Use synonyms
participants
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number of participants
on
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in
basketball
increased from nine Use synonyms
thousand
to around twenty-five Use synonyms
thousand
from the year 1997 to 2017. It shows that the popularity of Use synonyms
basketball
was growing among Use synonyms
adults
gradually. Use synonyms
Similarly
, Linking Words
adults
involved in football and hiking Use synonyms
also
increased from thirty-three Linking Words
thousand
to forty-eight Use synonyms
thousand
and thirty-five Use synonyms
thousand
to forty-nine Use synonyms
thousand
respectively in those two time Use synonyms
period
.
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periods
On the other hand
, the craze of Linking Words
cricket
among Use synonyms
people
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was declining
drastically from 1997 to 2017 Wrong verb form
declined
while
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people
going to Use synonyms
gym
remained Correct article usage
the gym
same
( thirty-five Correct article usage
the same
thousand
) throughout the time period. Use synonyms
However
, Linking Words
people
participating in jogging as their main Use synonyms
Use synonyms
sports
increased slightly by one Fix the agreement mistake
sport
thousand
in the year 2017 in comparison with 1997.
In summary, the number of Use synonyms
people
Use synonyms
involving
in various Wrong verb form
involved
sports
Use synonyms
are
increasing day by day except Change the verb form
is
cricket
.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, basketball, cricket, people, thousand, adults with synonyms.
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