The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph depicts
variation
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a variation
the variation
of
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in
population
participating in different major Add an article
the population
sports
, gentle walking, basketball
, cricket
, jogging, gym, football and hiking, in the period of
1997 and 2017 in a specific area. As reflected by Change preposition
apply
Correct article usage
the Y'
Y'
axis, the population is measured from zero to 60 Change noun form
Y
thousands
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thousand
of
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apply
people
with interval
of ten Add an article
an interval
the interval
thousand
.
At first glance, it becomes clear that people
going to
gentle Change preposition
apply
walk
is highest in both 1997 and 2017 Replace the word
walking
while
people
going to gym
remained stable in both years. Correct article usage
the gym
Similarly
, people
playing basketball
increased from one time-interval
to Correct your spelling
time interval
next
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the next
whereas
the popularity of cricket
drastically decreased among adults
at same
time interval. Correct article usage
the same
Overall
, the number of
population Correct quantifier usage
apply
involving
in various Wrong verb form
involved
sports
like walking, basketball
, jogging, football and hiking were
lowest in 1997 and increased in 2017.
In more Correct subject-verb agreement
was
details
, around fifty Fix the agreement mistake
detail
thousand
of
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apply
adults
were participating
in gentle walking in 1997, Wrong verb form
participated
they
increased by five Correct pronoun usage
which
thousand
and became the highest participated sports
among other sports
in 2017.
Correspondingly, the participants
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number of participants
on
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in
basketball
increased from nine thousand
to around twenty-five thousand
from the year 1997 to 2017. It shows that the popularity of basketball
was growing among adults
gradually. Similarly
, adults
involved in football and hiking also
increased from thirty-three thousand
to forty-eight thousand
and thirty-five thousand
to forty-nine thousand
respectively in those two time period
.
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periods
On the other hand
, the craze of cricket
among people
was declining
drastically from 1997 to 2017 Wrong verb form
declined
while
people
going to gym
remained Correct article usage
the gym
same
( thirty-five Correct article usage
the same
thousand
) throughout the time period. However
, people
participating in jogging as their main sports
increased slightly by one Fix the agreement mistake
sport
thousand
in the year 2017 in comparison with 1997.
In summary, the number of people
involving
in various Wrong verb form
involved
sports
are
increasing day by day except Change the verb form
is
cricket
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, basketball, cricket, people, thousand, adults with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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