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some people think we learn best through in-person interaction with a teacher in a classroom. others believe that online learning is more effective

#people #interaction #teacher #classroom
Some people
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 that the best way of learning
was
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is
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 through
teacher
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a teacher
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 in a
classroom
,
while
 others
were
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are
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 strong in learning
through
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online is more useful.In my opinion,learning by way of offline is more effective and
benefcial
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beneficial
 rather than acquiring knowledge
in
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online for the growth of
student
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students
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.
In
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one
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 hand,there are
lot
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 of new technologies
were
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have been
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 introduced to the world.With the help of some social networks and websites,the
students
 can interact with high-level professors,teachers and businessmen who were
successfull
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successful
 in life and can help the youth
for
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 their problems.
Students
 can learn from
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platforms like
Youtube
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YouTube
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,Google and Byjus,
where
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they
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provide
huge
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 amount of
informations
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,ideas and
study
 materials.
For example
, ChatGPT,an artificial tool,
which
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 helps the
students
 to clear their doubts and it contributes outlook or plan to complete their
or
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project.
On the other hand
,learning in-person with a teacher in a
study
 hall
assist
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assists
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 the
student
 to have
self confidence
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 and to communicate with the staff to have better
relationship
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relationships
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 in the
classroom
.Offline classes reach out
the
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students
 to maintain a healthy partnership with
the
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colleagues to find solutions easily.
For instance
, a
study
 reported that
student
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students
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 who
astudies
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study
 in a
classroom
 have more intellectual skills and socializing skills. IN conclusion,
although
 learning in
online
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an online
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 way
have
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 some positive ideas, I believe that the
student
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students
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 who
study
 in a
classroom
 by a teacher have more understanding skills
,
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and,high
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high
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 level of confidence and it will
rise
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increase
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 the growth of the
student
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students
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 for their better future.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear and logical structure, making it difficult to follow your arguments. To improve this, ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that subsequent sentences support that idea. Use cohesive devices such as conjunctions and linking phrases effectively to guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are present but not fully developed. The introduction should clearly state your position and outline the main points you will discuss. The conclusion should summarise your main points and restate your opinion without introducing new information.
coherence cohesion
Main points are presented but not well-supported with specific evidence or examples. To enhance your essay, provide concrete examples that illustrate your points and explain how they support your argument. Use data, research findings, or hypothetical scenarios to make your arguments more convincing.
task achievement
The response to the task is incomplete as the essay only partially addresses the prompt. Make sure to directly address both views presented in the prompt before detailing your own position. Use the body paragraphs to explore both sides of the argument, offering insights and weighing the evidence before presenting a balanced conclusion.
task achievement
Ideas are presented but they are not clear or comprehensively explained. Avoid overgeneralization and focus on clarifying your ideas by defining key terms, explaining your reasoning, and expanding on your points to make sure they are clear and easily understood.
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The use of relevant specific examples to support your claims is weak. Draw on a range of examples and evidence from different sources to strengthen your argument. These could include case studies, personal experiences, or factual information that is directly relevant to the prompt.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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