Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

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we will talk about why in so many countries
students
do not prefer to choose
science
as a subject in the universities. There are plenty of reasons for
this
problem and what effect does
this
have on society?
This
essay will suggest many reasons for
this
problem. The main reason
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this
problem is
lack
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the lack
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of trained Math and
Science
teachers
. If
students
do not get proper foundation and motivation in their school life to
persue
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pursue
science
, They will develop
Science
and Math phobia.
Due to
which
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they will prefer to choose any other stream than
science
to pursue their higher education. Eventually,
this
will
effect
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society in many ways. If
students
stopped
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taking
science
as their majors,
their
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will be
shortage
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of doctors. Because of that, people will suffer from many health problems.
Secondly
, if
students
do not take
science
as their major there will be no placement of
science
teachers
for the future generation.
According to
me, Government should take firm steps to stop
this
from happening. There must be some training or some programs to keep
teachers
up to date to enhance their teaching.
This
will enable
teachers
to make
science
subjects enjoyable for
students
,
for instance
,
teachers
may incorporate technology in the learning process.
To conclude
, I
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that government and
teachers
should take the responsibility to create
the
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environment to learn these subjects in a fun way.
This
will, eventually, increase the number of
students
enrolling for
Science
Subjects in
coming
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future.
Otherwise
, it may have
negative
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impact on society which will not be a good sign for any country.
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