In today's world many people owm a smartphone. Do you think the advantages of owning a smartphone outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, a plethora of

people

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possess a

smartphone

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. It is argued that a

smartphone

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has more benefits or more drawbacks. I would say that the advantages of having a

smartphone

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outweigh the disadvantages on the ground that

smartphones

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help

people

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contact

with

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apply

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relatives and

saving our

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save

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time

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and

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efforts

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. The most noticeable advantage of

smartphones

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is communicating effectively. Two centuries ago, the letter

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the major way to stay in touch with relatives, but they were often lost and torn during the delivery. Making a phone call directly to a person indeed is more

conveniently

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and the information in the speech cannot be lost.

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smartphones

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incoparate

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incorporate

social apps

such

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as Zalo and Facebook, so video

call

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calls

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can be made and many

people

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are keen on

this

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way of connection, especially with

whom

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have

stay

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stayed

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apart from their families for a long

time

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. Another advantage of possessing a

smartphone

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time

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and

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efforts

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effort

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could be saved. With

help

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the help

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of the internet, we can solve multiple tasks effortlessly.

Instead

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of staying in a long queue at shopping

centers

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centres

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, customers just have to click the mouse and

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

312 words

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In today's world many people owm a smartphone. Do you think the advantages of owning a smartphone outweigh the disadvantages?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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