nuclear power is far too dangerous, therefore, countries should ban its use and concentrate instead on developing alternative sources such as hydroelectric power and solar energy.to what extent do you agree.
Due to
scarcity in this
era, there is a lot of development of energy
sources especially in nuclear power
. Some believe of the opinion that this
source should be avoid
. Change the verb form
be avoided
This
essay express
complete agreement with Change the verb form
expresses
this
viewpoint and will justify how this
energy
gives
a bad impact in Verb problem
has
a
Correct article usage
the
long-term
.
Correct your spelling
long term
Although
nuclear is more efficient on
its size, small size for huge Change preposition
in
application
, Fix the agreement mistake
applications
this
power
needs utilization
of water in a huge amount. Correct article usage
the utilization
This
Change the determiner
This drawback
These drawbacks
drawbacks
possibly harmful for the animals underwater because water that has been used will reverse to the sea Add a verb
drawbacks are
drawbacks were
in
a high temperature. In Change preposition
at
a
Correct article usage
the
Add a comma
long-term,
long-term
it will damage the ecosystem Correct your spelling
long term
it self
.
It seems undeniable that nuclear creates a minimum footprint of Correct your spelling
itself
carbodioxide
, but it produces radioactive Correct your spelling
carbon dioxide
wastes
. Linked to Fix the agreement mistake
waste
this
fact that
Add a missing verb
is that
this
power
carry
another Change the verb form
carries
challanges
as nuclear will take time more than 100 years to be recovered. Correct your spelling
challenges
challenge
However
, it will be more reliable to regenerate other alternative
Change the wording
another alternative
other alternatives
such
as hydroelectric power
and solar energy
since they are has been exist
and might be developed.
In conclusion, it has been argued in Wrong verb form
have existed
this
essay that countries have been suggested to upgrade alternative resources like hydroelectric power
and solar energy
rather than nuclear power
because its drawbacks outweigh the advantages in a
Correct article usage
the
long-term
.Correct your spelling
long term
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