nuclear power is far too dangerous, therefore, countries should ban its use and concentrate instead on developing alternative sources such as hydroelectric power and solar energy.to what extent do you agree.

Due to
scarcity in
this
era, there is a lot of development of
energy
sources especially in nuclear
power
. Some believe of the opinion that
this
source should
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express
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complete agreement with
this
viewpoint and will justify how
this
energy
gives
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a bad impact in
a
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long-term
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.
Although
nuclear is more efficient
on
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its size, small size for huge
application
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,
this
power
needs
utilization
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of water in a huge amount.
This
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possibly harmful for the animals underwater because water that has been used will reverse to the sea
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a high temperature. In
a
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it will damage the ecosystem
it self
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. It seems undeniable that nuclear creates a minimum footprint of
carbodioxide
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carbon dioxide
, but it produces radioactive
wastes
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. Linked to
this
fact
that
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this
power
carry
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another
challanges
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challenges
challenge
as nuclear will take time more than 100 years to be recovered.
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, it will be more reliable to regenerate
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such
as hydroelectric
power
and solar
energy
since they
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and might be developed. In conclusion, it has been argued in
this
essay that countries have been suggested to upgrade alternative resources like hydroelectric
power
and solar
energy
rather than nuclear
power
because its drawbacks outweigh the advantages in
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