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The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table statistics the total of visitors to Ashdown
Museum
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 during the year before and after
refurbishment
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. The charts illustrate the results of the examination of customer satisfaction during the two periods.
Overall
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, the year before
refurbishment
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, the
number
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 of dissatisfied
people
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 occupied a trivial proportion. After the Ashdown
Museum
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 was refurbished, the
number
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 of respondents who tend to switch to the satisfied option occupies the largest position. The
number
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 of visitors to Ashdown
Museum
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 during the year before
refurbishment
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 was 74,000
people
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.
While
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, after the
Museum
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 was refurbished, the
number
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 of questionnaires was 92,000
people
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. Before the
refurbishment
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, it can be easily seen that the
number
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 of satisfied
people
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 took second place at 30% after dissatisfied responses at 40%.
However
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, after
refurbishment
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, the
number
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 of satisfied
people
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 tended to increase by 10% and dissatisfied responses dropped sharply by 25%.
Additionally
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, before
refurbishment
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, the
number
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 of very satisfied, very dissatisfied, and no response
people
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 was 15, 10, and 5% respectively. But after, the
number
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 of very satisfied
people
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 climbed sharply by 20%, and the
number
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 of
people
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 with very dissatisfied and no response both accounted for 5%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, refurbishment, number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
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