The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five autralia cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five autralia cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates
that
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apply
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the drinking habits and buying
coffee
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and tea
for
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in
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different
Austalian
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Australian
cities.
Overall
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, the number of
coffee
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is more demanding than the fresh
coffee
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for all areas.
According to
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results
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the results
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, the
percentages
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percentage
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of the Hobart resistants instant
coffee
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is at around 55%,
however
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, the fresh
coffee
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is at nearly 37% which is the best
differences
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are
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observed.
Similarly
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, Brisbane has a huge range between
two
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the two
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types at around 20%.
On the other hand
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, the smallest
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difference
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belongs to Sdyney which is nearly 2%. Another important data is drinking
preferance
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preference
to
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apply
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in
cafe
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cafes
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or other places. The
percentages
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percentage
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of Hobart and Melbourne
citizents
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citizens
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who choose
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choose
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choose to
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go to
cafe
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cafes
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at
apporoximately
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approximately
63% which
nearly
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is nearly
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similiar
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similar
each
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to each
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other.
Otherwise
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,
the
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half
percent
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per cent
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of
indivuduals
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individuals
from Adelaide
have
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a
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the
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smallest
percent
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per cent
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for habits. In conclusion, going cafe for drinking is popular
for
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in
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several areas of Australia.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • consumption
  • beverage
  • preference
  • compare
  • quantities
  • supermarkets
  • cafes
  • consume
  • patterns
  • notable
  • significant
  • trends
  • demographic
  • gender
  • habit
  • occasionally
  • frequently
  • cultural influence
  • workdays
  • weekends
  • paraphrase
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • draw conclusions
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