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maps illustrates changes betweeen two

maps illustrates changes betweeen two
The two maps illustrate the
road
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 access to a
city
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 hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
Overall
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, two new
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 and a separate public car park were built in 2010.
In addition
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to
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apply
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, the replacement of
bus
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 stops with a new
bus
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 station.
To begin
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, in 2007, after crossing
City
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Road
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 and Hospital
Rd
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 intersection toward the
northen
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northern
side
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, there were 3
bus
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 stops on each
side
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 of the
road
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 just before reaching the
city
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 hospital. After taking the right
side
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 from Hospital
Rd
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 toward Ring
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road
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Road
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, there was an entrance on the right
side
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 to the staff and public car park.
However
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, in 2010, two new roundabouts were built, the former was
in
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at
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 the intersection of
City
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road
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Road
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 and Hospital
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Rd
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Road
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,
while
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 the latter joined the end of Hospital
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Rd
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Road
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 and the south
side
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 of Ring
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road
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Road
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.
Bus
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 stops were removed and replaced with a new
bus
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 station. What is more, staff and public car parks were separated, the first had the same position as they were joined
in
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on
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 the southern
side
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 of the hospital,
while
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 the second was constructed down Ring
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road
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Road
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 on the eastern
side
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 of the hospital.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, bus, rd, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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