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The graph shows the differencies in wheat export over the three areas

The graph shows the differencies in wheat export over the three areas
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The line graph compares three areas (
Australia
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,
Canada
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, and
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European
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the European
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Community
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) in terms of their wheat
export
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 from 1985 to 1990.
Overall
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,
Canada
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 and
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European
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the European
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Community
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 showed a fluctuation
of
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in
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 exports ending
European
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Community
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 has the highest
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export
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exports
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,
while
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Australia
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 experienced a steady declining. In 1985, the wheat
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export
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exports
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 of
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Australia
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,
Canada
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 and
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European
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the European
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Community
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 were 15, nearly 17 and nearly 19 respectively. By 1986, both
Canada
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 and
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European
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the European
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Community
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 experienced a decrease to around 14 and around 18 respectively,
while
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Australia
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 showed a slight increase. In 1988
Canada
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's
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export
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exports
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 increased sharply and reached
its
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their
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 peak at 25 and
then
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 plunged sharply to around 14 in 1989 before
it
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they
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 began to rise.
Australia
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 started as the lowest in 1985 at 15 and experienced a
slightly
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 rise in 1986.
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, it began to steadily
declined
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decline
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throughtout
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throughout
 the period. In 1985,
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European
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the European
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Community
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 started at nearly 17 and
then
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 experienced a steady rise and by 1990 became the
areas
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area
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 with the highest wheat
export
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around
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at around
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 21%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, canada, european, community, export with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export
  • wheat
  • trade
  • produce
  • agricultural commodity
  • volume
  • metric tonnes
  • economic impact
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • domestic market
  • international market
  • export quota
  • trade barriers
  • comparative advantage
  • seasonal variation
  • supply chain
  • harvest
  • yield
  • competition
  • sustainability
  • forecast
  • logistics
  • subsidy
  • tariff
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