The graph shows the differencies in wheat export over the three areas

The graph shows the differencies in wheat export over the three areas
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The line graph compares three areas (
Australia
,
Canada
, and
European
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the European
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Community
) in terms of their wheat
export
from 1985 to 1990.
Overall
,
Canada
and
European
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the European
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Community
showed a fluctuation
of
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in
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exports ending
European
Community
has the highest
export
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exports
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,
while
Australia
experienced a steady declining. In 1985, the wheat
export
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exports
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of
Austalia
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Australia
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,
Canada
and
European
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the European
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Community
were 15, nearly 17 and nearly 19 respectively. By 1986, both
Canada
and
European
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the European
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Community
experienced a decrease to around 14 and around 18 respectively,
while
Australia
showed a slight increase. In 1988
Canada
's
export
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exports
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increased sharply and reached
its
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their
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peak at 25 and
then
plunged sharply to around 14 in 1989 before
it
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they
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began to rise.
Australia
started as the lowest in 1985 at 15 and experienced a
slightly
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rise in 1986.
However
, it began to steadily
declined
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decline
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throughtout
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throughout
the period. In 1985,
European
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the European
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Community
started at nearly 17 and
then
experienced a steady rise and by 1990 became the
areas
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area
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with the highest wheat
export
around
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at around
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21%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, canada, european, community, export with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • export
  • wheat
  • trade
  • produce
  • agricultural commodity
  • volume
  • metric tonnes
  • economic impact
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • domestic market
  • international market
  • export quota
  • trade barriers
  • comparative advantage
  • seasonal variation
  • supply chain
  • harvest
  • yield
  • competition
  • sustainability
  • forecast
  • logistics
  • subsidy
  • tariff
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