The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
These two bar graphs illustrate the figures of graduate and postgraduate
pupile
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pupils
pupil
who
did'nt
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didn't
work
full
time
after finishing their higher studies in 2008 in the United
KIngdom
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Kingdom
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.
Overall
, most of the
students
who did complete their higher education have focused on their
further
education and it has
effected
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affected
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them to choose not to
work
full
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full-time
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time
.
Despite
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Despite this
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, few graduates and postgraduates had
avoid
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avoided
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to
work
full
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full-time
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time
because of their charity
work
.
Moreover
, in 2008 graduate
students
and
post graduatre
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post-graduate
students
have
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apply
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mainly focused on more studies and
secondly
conciderable
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considerable
number of
students
have
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apply
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focused on
part
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part-time
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time
jobs,
it
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which
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is 17,735 and 2535
respectivley
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respectively
.
However
, most of the
students
have started to
work
full
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full-time
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time
after completing their postgraduate degrees.
According to
the given
graphs
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graphs,
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lesser job opportunities in the market
also
have impacted them to
work
part
time
. It was 15,235
of
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apply
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graduate
students
and 1,625 postgraduate
students
.
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