The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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These two bar graphs illustrate the figures of graduate and postgraduate
pupile
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pupils
pupil
who
did'nt
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didn't
work
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full
time
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after finishing their higher studies in 2008 in the United
KIngdom
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Kingdom
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.
Overall
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, most of the
students
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who did complete their higher education have focused on their
further
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education and it has
effected
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affected
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them to choose not to
work
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full
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full-time
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time
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.
Despite
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, few graduates and postgraduates had
avoid
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avoided
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to
work
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full
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full-time
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time
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because of their charity
work
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.
Moreover
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, in 2008 graduate
students
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and
post graduatre
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post-graduate
students
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have
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apply
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mainly focused on more studies and
secondly
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conciderable
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considerable
number of
students
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have
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apply
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focused on
part
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part-time
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time
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jobs,
it
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which
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is 17,735 and 2535
respectivley
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respectively
.
However
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, most of the
students
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have started to
work
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full
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full-time
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time
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after completing their postgraduate degrees.
According to
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the given
graphs
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graphs,
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lesser job opportunities in the market
also
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have impacted them to
work
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part
time
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. It was 15,235
of
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apply
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graduate
students
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and 1,625 postgraduate
students
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, time, students with synonyms.
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