The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their graduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the Anthropologists in work after five years.

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Shown below is a chart depicting the destination of Anthropology

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in a university and a table revealing the salaries of the

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. From the chart, we can conclude that most of the

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are working full time once they finish their studies, with a percentage reaching 52% of the total

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, a percentage of 15% of

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are working

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part-time time

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. A minority of the

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decided to continue their studies, with only 8% of the

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doing so. There are

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who prefer doing both, where 5 % of the

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are working

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part-time

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continuing their degree.

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, 12% of the

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are still figuring out their next step and remain unemployed. We can

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interpret from the table that the salaries of the alumna vary from $25,000 to $100,000. The government sector produces the highest amount of Anthropology

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with a wage above $100,000, reaching 50% of the total working grad. Consulting has

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, with 40% of the consulting

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earnings from $75.000 to $100,000.

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working in private companies tend to receive lesser salaries with only 30% of the

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receiving $100,000 as their income. In conclusion, most of the Anthropology

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are working full time. With the amount of pay reaching

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more than $100,000.

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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their graduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the Anthropologists in work after five years.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Other believe it is important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.

“Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

In some countries children take up paid jobs during the summer vacation. Some people feel that this amounts to child labour. Others argue that summer jobs help children learn valuable lessons. Discuss both views and give your opinion.