The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their graduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the Anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their graduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the Anthropologists in work after five years.
Shown below is a chart depicting the destination of Anthropology
graduates
in a university and a table revealing the salaries of the
graduates
. From the chart, we can conclude that most of the
students
are working full time once they finish their studies, with a percentage reaching 52% of the total
graduates
.
However
, a percentage of 15% of
graduates
are working
part-timetime
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part-time time
part-time-time
instead
. A minority of the
students
decided to continue their studies, with only 8% of the
students
doing so. There are
also
students
who prefer doing both, where 5 % of the
graduates
are working
part-timetime
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part-time
while
also
continuing their degree.
Nevertheless
, 12% of the
students
are still figuring out their next step and remain unemployed. We can
also
interpret from the table that the salaries of the alumna vary from $25,000 to $100,000. The government sector produces the highest amount of Anthropology
alumnus
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with a wage above $100,000, reaching 50% of the total working grad. Consulting has
also
become an interest for
the
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graduates
, with 40% of the consulting
grad
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receiving
a
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earnings from $75.000 to $100,000.
Students
working in private companies tend to receive lesser salaries with only 30% of the
graduates
receiving $100,000 as their income. In conclusion, most of the Anthropology
students
are working full time. With the amount of pay reaching
to
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more than $100,000.
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