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The maps show the village park 10 years ago and the village car park now.

The maps show the village park 10 years ago and the village car park now.
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The given maps illustrate the comparison of the
village
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park
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 layout between ten years ago and the current condition.
Overall
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 it can be clearly seen that there are several new facilities were built, existing sports courts were enlarged, and some of them were replaced with another. In terms of the
village
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park
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 a decade ago, the
park
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 was in a square shape with an entrance on the northwest of the
park
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.
Football
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The football
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 pitch is situated in the
center
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centre
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 of the
park
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.
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, a car
park
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 can be found to the south near the entrance, with a capacity of 20 cars. Two tennis courts were located in the middle north of the
park
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 with a
children
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's play
area
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 next to the east.
Lastly
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, Woods and Pond lay
closed
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close
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with
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to
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 the football pitch, to the southeast and south of it, respectively. Regarding the present layout of the
village
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park
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, the tennis court was expanded twice as before. The car
park
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also
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 experienced the same development, enlarged, and could provide for 50 cars. A cafe and toilet are built at the expense of wood,
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 a pond now is utilized for boating bikes.
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,
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children's
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the children's
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 play
area
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 was renovated and separated into two areas, the
children
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's
park
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 and the
children
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's soft
area
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. New facilities were built on the southwest corner of the
park
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 for a picnic
area
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 and a cycle path surrounding the
village
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park
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.
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, the football pitch is the only unchanged facility.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, park, children, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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