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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates details about energy consumption in the United States from a 2008 report since 1980, with
prediction
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 until 2030.
Overall
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, the graph clearly reveals that
,
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apply
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 petrol and oil , coal and natural gas
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consumptions
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consumption
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are
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have
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 increased gradually and
expected
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are expected
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 to increase.
Whereas
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 nuclear, solar, wind and hydropower
consumptions
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 are constant over the
period
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 and
predicted
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are predicted
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 to Remain constant. Petrol, oil and coal
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consumptions
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consumption
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 increased gradually over the
period
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 from 1980 to 2008 with 35 to around 50 quadrillions units and just above 15 to over 25 quadrillions units each respectively and
moreover
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, both are predicted to rise in
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consumptions
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consumption
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 over the years until 2030.
Likewise
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, natural gas consumption has increased with little fluctuations over the
period
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.
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, four different energies which are nuclear, solar, wind and hydropower
consumptions
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 remained constant over the
period
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 from 1980 to 2008 with just above 5 quadrillion units at the same time it is predicted to remain constant over the
period
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 of years until 2030.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumptions, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • trends
  • marked increase
  • dominant source
  • modest increase
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • nuclear energy
  • noticeable decline
  • span
  • petroleum
  • natural gas
  • coal
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