One of your friends is planning to visit your country and asking you for some information. Write a letter to him/her and say: o when the best time to visit your country is o suggest a plan for the travel o recommend places to visit in your country

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Dear Ang, I hope you are in a good situation. I
have
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had
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to read your letter yesterday, I am so sorry I
forget
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to reply
your
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to your
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letter. I heard you would like to
visit
Indonesia, right? I
am
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would be
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happy if you
are
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visited
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visit
my country.
Moreover
, we can spend
time
together. I would like to give
your
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you
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suggestion
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a suggestion
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what
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on what
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place
you should
to
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apply
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visit
. When you
coming
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to Indonesia, you must
to
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apply
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visit
Bali
.
Bali
is
the
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one of the
most
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places
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place
you
to
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apply
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visit
.
In
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There
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there
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there,
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you can
visit
some
place
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places
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such
as Canggu and Kuta.
Furthermore
, the weather in
Bali
is winter.
Its
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It's
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a good
time
for you to
coming
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come
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in
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to
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Bali
. You can go to some
place
such
as
Beach
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the Beach
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Club, and
than
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then
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you can spend
you
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your
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time
with a view
in
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of
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Canggu, obviously you can go to the famous mall. You still like to shopping right? Beachwalk is a suitable
place
for you to
visit
and buy some clothes over there. I can not
to
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wait to see you and
spen
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spend
out
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apply
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time
together because we have not seen each other for a long
time
. I
waiting
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waiting for
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your positive response and I would like to join you if you
coming
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come
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to
Bali
Your
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Yours
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sincerely,
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coherence cohesion
The structure of the paragraphs could be improved for better clarity and logical flow. Aim to discuss each main point in separate paragraphs with clear, cohesive transitions.
task achievement
Remember to use a consistent and suitable tone throughout your letter. While the overall tone is appropriate, there are instances where the language is too casual or informal for the context.
task achievement
Ensure that the letter addresses all the points mentioned in the task: best time to visit mentioned briefly but could be expanded, a more detailed travel plan should be provided, and while some places to visit are suggested, more could be done to develop this section.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively: each paragraph should have a clear purpose and contain a single main idea or point. Make sure to start a new paragraph for each new topic or aspect of your discussion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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