One of your friends is planning to visit your country and asking you for some information. Write a letter to him/her and say: o when the best time to visit your country is o suggest a plan for the travel o recommend places to visit in your country
Dear Ang,
I hope you are in a good situation. I
have
to read your letter yesterday, I am so sorry I Wrong verb form
had
forget
to reply Wrong verb form
forgot
your
letter. I heard you would like to Change preposition
to your
visit
Indonesia, right? I am
happy if you Wrong verb form
would be
are
Wrong verb form
visited
visit
my country. Moreover
, we can spend time
together. I would like to give your
Correct pronoun usage
you
suggestion
Correct article usage
a suggestion
what
Change preposition
on what
place
you should to
Change the verb form
apply
visit
. When you coming
to Indonesia, you must Wrong verb form
come
to
Change the verb form
apply
visit
Bali
. Bali
is the
one of the Correct article usage
apply
most
Fix the agreement mistake
places
place
you to
Fix the infinitive
apply
visit
. In
Change preposition
There
there
you can Add a comma
there,
visit
some place
Fix the agreement mistake
places
such
as Canggu and Kuta.
Furthermore
, the weather in Bali
is winter. Its
a good Replace the word
It's
It is
time
for you to coming
Wrong verb form
come
in
Change preposition
to
Bali
. You can go to some place
such
as Beach
Club, and Correct article usage
the Beach
than
you can spend Replace the word
then
you
Change the pronoun
your
time
with a view in
Canggu, obviously you can go to the famous mall. You still like to shopping right? Beachwalk is a suitable Change preposition
of
place
for you to visit
and buy some clothes over there.
I can not to
wait to see you and Fix the infinitive
apply
spen
Correct your spelling
spend
out
Change preposition
apply
time
together because we have not seen each other for a long time
. I waiting
your positive response and I would like to join you if you Add the preposition
waiting for
coming
to Wrong verb form
come
Bali
Your
sincerely,Correct the word
Yours
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coherence cohesion
The structure of the paragraphs could be improved for better clarity and logical flow. Aim to discuss each main point in separate paragraphs with clear, cohesive transitions.
task achievement
Remember to use a consistent and suitable tone throughout your letter. While the overall tone is appropriate, there are instances where the language is too casual or informal for the context.
task achievement
Ensure that the letter addresses all the points mentioned in the task: best time to visit mentioned briefly but could be expanded, a more detailed travel plan should be provided, and while some places to visit are suggested, more could be done to develop this section.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively: each paragraph should have a clear purpose and contain a single main idea or point. Make sure to start a new paragraph for each new topic or aspect of your discussion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite