In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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paragraph with a suitable conclusion. Supporting my agreement to the given statement.I firmly believe that
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coherence cohesion
Ensure you have a clear essay structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each part of the essay should serve its purpose: an introduction to present the topic and your thesis, body paragraphs to support your viewpoint, and a conclusion to summarize your argument. The essay submitted was incomplete and lacked a clear structure.
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Expand your main points with clear and well-developed arguments. Use relevant examples to support your ideas, ensuring they are specific and directly related to the topic. The essay provided did not develop the argument sufficiently, nor did it include specific examples.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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