Task 1: The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Task 1: The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university

did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries

of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by

selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The
table
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illustrate
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illustrates
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careers
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the careers
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of Antrophology graduates after finishing their studies
from
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at
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one university
while
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table
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the table
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give
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gives
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us information
the
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on the
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wages of the
antrophologists
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anthropologists
anthropologist
employees, namely freelance
consultans
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consultants
consultant
, government sector and private companies.
Overall
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, the highest percentage from the chart is full-time work
while
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the lowest number is part-time work and
post graduate
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post-graduate
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study. From the
table
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, there are 3 types of employment that show huge different salaries. It can be seen from the pie chart that more than half of the graduates
working
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work
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as full-time
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worker
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workers
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, which makes
this
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percentage
is
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the largest.
In addition
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, the
propotion
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proportion
of full-time master study is the same as not known jobs.
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, unemployed and part-time
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worker
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workers
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are only 3
percent
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per cent
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differences
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different
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where
part-time
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the part-time
a part-time
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worker
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is
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apply
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bigger than the employed. The
last
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position is 5% of part-time
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worker
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workers
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including
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postgraduate
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study which is the smallest one among them.
Besides
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that, there is data from
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table
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a table
the table
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,
it is clear that
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35% of people who work at private companies got salaries between 50.000 - 74.999 dollars that makes them the hugest in
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this
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these
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numbers. Freelance consultants and
government
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the government
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sector
are in
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the same wages which is 15%.
This
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is similar to wages from 25.000 dollars to 49.999 dollars. The other salaries have 5-10% different shares.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, they got
bonus
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bonuses
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which
dominated
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are dominated
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by
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worker
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workers
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in
government
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the government
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sector.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words table, worker with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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