Some people say the Olympic games are not relevant in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?
Some people think that
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Olympic
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outdated
out data
this
current century we living on
. I believe that the Olympic Change preposition
in
games
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Games
changes
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change
it
purpose to fit the 21st century. Change the pronoun
its
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Nowadays
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to be Correct your spelling
athletic
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apart
of it, It is an Correct your spelling
a part
opporitinty
for them to gain medals and fame,and it is Correct your spelling
opportunity
sponcers
by Correct your spelling
sponsors
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the goverment
goverment
of every nation Correct your spelling
government
governments
became
it is a Change the verb form
to become
way
for countries to use there
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their
wining
teams as soft Correct your spelling
winning
power
, they support there sport
team to wins as many gold Change the noun form
sports
medalic
to show there excellent in every field.
When it Correct your spelling
medals
medalist
medallic
come
to Change the verb form
comes
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Olympic
games
, it is serve
an international purpose for every country to gather in one place,and Change the verb form
serves
celeberate
and support sports and Correct your spelling
celebrate
athelic
, it is the most Correct your spelling
athletic
athletics
importan
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important
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for this
athelic
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athletic
there
talent,and make Replace the word
their
there
nation proud.
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their
this
event
make
countries spend money and Change the verb form
makes
resoures
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resources
compotions
,and it is a Correct your spelling
competitions
compositions
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of income for Correct your spelling
source
sources
this players
, to Change the determiner
this player
these players
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focus solely
in
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on
there
field and Correct your spelling
their
experity
.
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experience
for example
, there is a Jamaican man called Bullet,becouse
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because
his
is the fastest runner in the Correct pronoun usage
he
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and Correct your spelling
Olympics
wins
many times, Wrong verb form
has won
nows
many Correct your spelling
now
sport
wear companies have Add an article
a contract
contract
with him, and he shows in many ads, his Fix the agreement mistake
contracts
proforment
in the Correct your spelling
preformed
preferment
games
changes his life to the better.
in
the other hand, nations compiting Change preposition
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others not throw hard Correct your spelling
against
power
like war, but throw
soft Wrong verb form
throwing
power
, and sport
event
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for nations specially wealthly
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wealthy
powerfull
nations to Correct your spelling
powerful
shows
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there
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their
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through
games
and have as many
gold as possible.
for Correct quantifier usage
much
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instance
cold war
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US
and Sociat Correct article usage
the US
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Union
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allies
where
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were
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competing
others
to Change to a singular noun
other
wins
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. it is Correct your spelling
other
others
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of Correct article usage
a kind
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symbolic
enemey
in Correct your spelling
enemy
enemies
sport
.
In concluion
, Correct your spelling
conclusion
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Olympic
games
is
a Correct subject-verb agreement
are
way
for the best athelts
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athletes
gain
fame and wealth, and it is a Fix the infinitive
to gain
way
for countries show
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to show
there
soft Correct your spelling
their
power
throw there wining
players and teams.Correct your spelling
their winning
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