The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.

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The line graphs illustrate data about the average monthly spending of British parents on the

sports

of their

children

, and

also

the number of participants in three different

sports

fields including Football,

Athletics

and Swimming over the six-year period between 2008 and 2014.

It is clear that

the average amount of money spent on

children

’s

sports

in Britain witnessed an upward trend.

Also

, the number of

children

who participated in all the

sports

fields mentioned rose. In 2008, almost 8

million

children

took part in Football,

while

only about 2

million

and 0.5

million

children

participated in Swimming and

Athletics

, respectively. Having remained stable at the same amount, the figure for kids' participation in Football

then

went up slightly reaching 9

million

in 2014. On average, the monthly expense of the

sports

of British

children

was nearly 20 pounds and

then

increased steadily by twelve pounds in 2014. Regarding

children

who participated in

Athletics

courses, it remained stable until 2010, and by 2012, it had leapfrogged the figure for participants in Swimming and peaked at 5

million

children

. Despite the slight fall,

Athletics

was a more popular

sports

option for

children

than Swimming at 4

million

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The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.

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most employers do job interview before offering a position to a person. do you think this is the best way to do it, or are there better alternatives? what is the best method of choosing employees in your opinion?

While travelling by metro train, your credit card slipped out of your pocket. You realized this only after reaching home. Write a letter to the concerned authorities and explain what happened.