n today's world many people own a smartphone. Do you think the advantages of owning a smartphone outweigh the disadvantages?

In the modern

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era, there is a large amount of individuals

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a mobile phone.

Overall

, in

this

context, I would argue that the benefits of production, transportation and sales outweigh the drawbacks

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using disturbs others. There is one major negative aspect of the way in which mobile

phones

are often used. In order to live in harmony with one another in society, people must show consideration for others, especially in public places. Personally,

for example

, I do not consider that using a mobile phone to make small talk in a loud voice is socially acceptable.

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some people may have a

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attitude to

such

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, I have frequently agreed with

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passengers on buses or trains who chat endlessly at the top of their voices on their

phones

, oblivious to around them. Fortunately, codes of conduct are strictly enforced in cinemas, theatres and concert halls, where mobile

phones

must be switched off.

However

, most people would say that their mobile phone enables them to do so many things which improve their lifestyle. Entrepreneurs argue that it is easier to conduct their business outside the office if customers or employees can contact them instantly,

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to place an order or arrive at a quick decision. With the rapid transactions made possible by mobile

phones

. The improved efficiency of production, transportation and sales boosts the whole economy. Fewer firms go out of business and everyone is able to earn a living. Individuals

also

benefit, taking into account the ease with which they can contact friends and family, whether for important matters or just a chat. In

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I believe that mobile

phones

have had huge positive impacts on society.

This

is despite the inconsiderate use by a minority.