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Percantage of mobile phones owners using various mobile features in 2006 2008 and 2010

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The table provides data regarding the
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percentage
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utilising
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 2006, 2008 and 2010. It can be concluded from the graph that the proportion of giving a call was used the most contrasting to others, It cannot denied that
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,It is worth noticing
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substantially
as well as
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 the uppermost programmes were Make calls with
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 results at 100% in 2006 with that of 2008,
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 later, It reached 71% during these times Send and
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receive
 text messages were on climb 2 times to 75%. Ultimately, they achieved 99%, 75%,
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contained Play games, Play music and Record video went up markedly,
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 it comes to 2010,
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received
 35%.
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