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Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. Why do so many people want to study in English? Why is English such an important international language? Give reasons for your answer.

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In the era of Globalisation, learning different
langugae
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language
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skill
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 become a trend.
Higher
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 number of
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individuals
 move to
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Australia
, Britain, and America for education and work.
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, in order to survive there they ought to learn the native language so that they can communicate, graduate with high scores
as well as
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 search
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job
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. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the reasons for learning an international
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language
in
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higher
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a higher
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 extent. Why
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 many citizens want
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english
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English
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 in their life?
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 reason is
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the status
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 symbol.
People
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 believe that
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english
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 learning can enhance their lifestyle. They belong to
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 society if they speak in
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.
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,
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 to learn international languages for lifestyle.
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, studies show that
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 of
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english
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English
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 learning
students
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 in India
,
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 is higher as compared to Hindi learning
students
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. Another reason is globalisation, employers from all over the globe search for better employees. If a candidate
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 to apply for
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a job
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 vacancy other than home country , the person should be fluent in speaking and writing.
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, to secure
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employment for
better
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a better
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 future they start getting lessons
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such
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 subjects.
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,
migration
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in migration
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 for study,
students
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 shift from one place to another so that they can educate
theirselves
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themselves
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 in every field. From a report, it is seen that
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english
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English
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 is one of the
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language
languages
 which is spoken in developed countries.
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,
students
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 attend courses that can help them to communicate in
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 speaking language. In conclusion, learning an international skill
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 important as
people
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 start
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fror
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for
from
 better life. It is the demand of today's society. but,
People
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 should create a balance between learning and forgetting their own native
lanuguage
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language
.

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task response
Despite the essay addressing the reasons why many people want to learn English, there is a need for further elaboration and development of ideas with supporting details. Providing specific examples and references to studies is helpful, but ensure these are directly relevant and accurately represented to support the arguments more effectively.
coherence cohesion
There are clear paragraphs which help to organize the content; however, the logical flow between ideas can be improved. Work on transitions between sentences and ideas to strengthen coherence. Aim for a clear introductory sentence for each paragraph, and ensure that each subsequent sentence builds on that idea.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalized education
  • Access to education
  • High-quality institutions
  • Career opportunities
  • Proficiency
  • Prerequisite
  • Cultural immersion
  • Language skills
  • Global network
  • Technological advancements
  • Scientific research
  • Academic resources
  • Comprehensive
  • Personal development
  • Independence
  • Immersion
  • Employment prospects
  • Academic exposure
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