The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
The map highlights the transformation of Darwin
town’s
waterfront Capitalize word
Town’s
area
between 2009 and 2014. Overall
, most of the industrial areas have been turned into forests and residential areas. Furthermore
, there have also
been a few more buildings added around the perimeter.
In 2009, most land south of the three blocks of residential buildings in Darwin was reserved for industrial activities. To the north of this
building was a lake, some trees and more
industrial Correct article usage
a more
area
. There was also
a footpath
which wrapped around these sites, and which led to the sea which was east of the town
. In the northwest was a school, and next to it situated
a convention centre. Add a missing verb
was situated
Finally
there were two swimming pools beside the Add a comma
Finally,
footpath
that led to the sea, as well as
a fishing area
in the northwest area
of the town
.
In present day
Darwin, there have been three more residential blocks added. Add a hyphen
present-day
Furthermore
, the large swathes of land south of the housing facilities were replaced by forests and a university building lying west of the homes. Furthermore
, the industrial area
in the circle enveloped by the footpath
had been turned into a new swimming pool. Finally
, in the south of the town
, there is now a footpath
which runs from west to east, connected to a newly built harbour. The rest of the town
remained unchanged.Submitted by cathyngo1512 on
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